Friday, 1 March 2013

Love :)





There was once a not so young man
living in a not so far land.
His life was not so average,
a pleasant being whose sole goal was to keep others happy and smiling.
He had a large heart
and wonderful mind,
which had both been tainted by the friends of Life,
Trial and Tribulation.
On a not so beautiful day
having a not so easy chat with himself
while sitting on a not so large rock
Love came by and asked the not so young man,
“Why do you look so sad?”
He told Love that his heart was shrinking and his mind was rotting.
“Why?” Love asked
while she sat down next to him and placed her comforting arm around his shoulders
“It’s Life, he keeps stealing a part of my heart each day
and throws rubbish in my mind.”
Love smiled
and stroked the back of his neck,
“That is the purpose of Life, to hit you when you are down
and take from you that which cannot be taken.”
“So what should I do?  How do you keep Life from taking from you?”
“I plant seeds in my heart and mind
that grow into bountiful forests.”
“Seeds?”
The not so young man asked with a look confusion splashed across his face.
“Yes, seeds of all that is good.”
She then reached into a small, brown, leather bag
which was tied to her waist
and pulled out two sticks,
with what seemed to be berries stuck to their ends
and gave them to him.
“What is this?”
“Seeds.”
With that, Love floated away on a not so stiff breeze and whispered,
“I exist, not only through myself, but through you.”

Thabiso Nkoana©2007

2 comments:

  1. hey fellow poet,
    i really like this poem. i love how you used dialogue and structure to turn it into a narrative story. it's really thoughtful. i also like how you used the negative function for definite descriptions ("a not so..."). it fits really well.

    i was wondering if you could take a look at my blog (link is in my profile). its just getting started and has little to no traffic. i would also be more than happy to feature a link to your blog on mine (if you want).

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    1. greetings jessica.

      thank you kindly for your interest and more so for your insightful critique. just took a look at the work on your blog, i think you would like the work of south african poet keorapetse kgosisile, particularly his book "this way i salute you." something about yourself makes me think you will appreciate it. by the way, i don't mind if you do that. otherwise, keep writing and live poetically. may jah guide and protect you pon your journey. bless...

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